This Teacher idea provides information about and links to the TLF learning object 'Dream machine'. Chris McLennan describes how 'Dream machine' helped her students improve their descriptive writing by exploring the meaning and use of similes:
I started with a small literacy group, which included some Koorie students, and we all worked together to build their dream machines. They showed a lot of interest, especially with the vocabulary being so spacey and futuristic. The learning object led into writing passages using similes that described these bikes and enhanced their descriptive writing. The students from this literacy group showed the next literacy group what to do and read them their descriptive writing. It got the other students dying to have a go themselves.
The Koorie children in my class like a lot of visuals, a lot of hands-on. The learning object is very colourful, very visual, with simple instructions. They found it really exciting and were able to get involved quite readily, selecting from the menus and going through the modelling that goes with the object. The results were better sentence structures and more descriptive writing. Reluctant writers were more willing to have a go.
'Dream machine' helps the children who struggle with reading texts. They can hear the text and understand it and still get the learning without having to read the text on the screen. The objects provide immediate reinforcement and feedback to the children, which is really wonderful. Even if they make an error they receive feedback in a positive way with an opportunity to rethink how they went about solving the problem.
I think they're excited because there's a lot they've achieved and they've used a lot of strategies. They loved looking at each other's different bike designs and talking about them. It's a terrific object. And it's been really good for their writing.

Chris McLennan,'I like using them and the children have had positive and excited responses ...'
Traralgon Primary School, Victoria
Curriculum area
English
Year level
5–6
Focus
Using similes in descriptive writing.
- Students use vocabulary and imagery to enhance the meaning and aesthetics of a text.
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